Wednesday, January 18, 2012

Write on Wednesdays - The stories a tree could tell




 Image from Facebook

Write on Wednesdays is back for 2012 over at Inkpaperpen, and I'm hoping to throw myself in to it to make up for my inability to commit towards the end of 2011.

For our first prompt, Gill posted the gorgeous photo you see above from the Story facebook page. There are so many paths I could take to fit in with this picture, I think it's breathtaking and completely inspiring as a writing prompt. Here's my piece for this week:

Long ago, when the earth was new and quiet, the Great Trees wandered freely over field and mountains. Clustered together in herds, their roots, unseen beneath massive trunks, would carry them over the earth, carving deep troughs in the ground as they moved.

They followed the sun, and the rain, the wind and the mist. Birds would fly after them, at times raising their young in nests perched within these mobile homes.

The Father Tree of the very last herd of Great Trees that ever existed had grown very old, and his sight and instinct began to deterioriate. On a dark, cold and gusty night, he kept his herd moving, but after a time he became aware that the group of trees he could hear and feel beside him had gotten smaller, until eventually there was no herd around him at all. He called and called, but none answered. He waited until the daylight began its gradual appearance over the world, and before him saw a cold and deserted beach, and nothing more. His herd were lost, and so was he. He lay down in despair, but was never able to get up again.

18 comments:

  1. That was a wonderfully somber and melancholy look at the prompt, and I love it! The ending was heart wrenching, but it fit so perfectly with the picture. Your writing was amazing!

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    1. Thank you Claire! I agree, I had tears building as I was writing the ending, but I'm really happy with it.

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  2. Very sad ending but still an amazing piece to read.

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  3. Such a great piece, Janelle, I was absorbed by it. I love the idea and it is just so very sad, the Father Tree unable to get up, abandoned by his herd. Beautiful writing. It reminded me of the trees in the Lord of the Rings but darker, a little more sad. I like the bit about him losing his instinct with age. I hope you are pleased with this, it's lovely.

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    1. Funny you should mention LOTR Gill, as I thought the same thing after I wrote it! I am pleased with it, it is very sad and I tend to stay away from sad writing and reading, but I think it's good to break a boundary once in a while and I'm happy with the idea I came up with.
      Thanks for the prompt!

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  4. I love this Janelle, a simple "dreamtime" -type story, but so strong and powerful
    Kate

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    1. Yes I guess it does have a bit of a "dreamtime" feel to it, interesting observation! Thanks Kate.

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  5. This is so beautiful - and seems such a possible thing to have happened in days gone by... God bless imaginations :)

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    1. Thanks Donna, yes that's the beauty of Write on Wednesday, getting to flex the imagination which sadly gets neglected a bit these days!

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  6. nice, janelle. very inventive. enjoyable..

    thanks for stopping by my post to read my story... i look forward to reading more of your stories....

    daphne

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    1. Thank you Daphne, likewise, I look forward to reading more from you :)

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  7. Absolutely beautiful and so sad. You should write children's stories. Wonderful writing. ;)

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    1. Thank you Tiffiny. Interesting thought, I've never considered trying my hand at children's stories, but will keep it in mind! Thanks for stopping by.

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  8. Written by a true fiction genious!I love the way you've made this piece into a beautiful, folky style story. So sad yet very poignant.

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    1. Thank you Kim, I was really happy with this piece! I really need to step out of my comfort zone this year though and try to write some non-fiction!
      Hope you're well :)

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  9. Interesting use of the prompt. Beautiful and well written, and so sad. Reading it, I was starting to think that maybe it was a folk tale :)

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    1. Thank you Melissa, I enjoyed writing it, perhaps it has some potential for me to expand in to a folk tale...

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